Tuesday, October 25, 2016
My horse and I walked gingerly through the dry yellow grass. A shiver of fear ran down my spine. Suddenly a loud BANG! shook the ground and my horse fell onto the dry grass as shrapnel flew through the air. All the soldiers began to charge once they had discovered that the enemy was attacking. Men fell like rain to the sound of gun fire. I sprang up from my bed with my heart thumping. Thump thump thump. The horrid nightmares still haunted my mind; however, that was over now and remarkably my scared horse and I were still alive.
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Awesome you gave that 110 pier sent effort.
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ReplyDeleteYes Grace, Kyle is right, you put 100% into everything you do - including this piece of writing! You have used onomatopoeia, repetition, short sentences, personification, simile and lovely description to create this story. It is no wonder it is such an interesting piece to read. Well done for working in that semicolon too! Next time don't forget to put your name as the title so that it shows up correctly in the Blog Archive.
ReplyDeleteWell done, from Miss R
Yes Grace, Kyle is right, you put 100% into everything you do - including this piece of writing! You have used onomatopoeia, repetition, short sentences, personification, simile and lovely description to create this story. It is no wonder it is such an interesting piece to read. Well done for working in that semicolon too! Next time don't forget to put your name as the title so that it shows up correctly in the Blog Archive.
ReplyDeleteWell done, from Miss R