Thursday, November 17, 2016

The First Robot To Set Foot On The Moon (Toa)

There was a very big BOOM and a very big CRASH as the robot in the spaceship went flying high up into space. The robot saw the big round moon a few miles away. The robot was already far,far off into space but he saw an asteroid coming straight for the spaceship. He flew straight around the asteroid and then he turned around and suddenly there was a BANG he had hit the moon. Then he thought to himself I have already accomplished his mission. Then he hopped back in his spaceship and zoomed off back to planet earth.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Toa, nice writing! i really like your use of onomatopoeia in your story. What made you write the beginning almost exactly like Herewini's beginning?

    Sincerely, Zac

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